
Hanging from the tree house railing, impatiens swing in the breeze. His mother, standing at the edge of the pine needles, discovered the bones of a child wrapped in a pink blanket.

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Hanging from the tree house railing, impatiens swing in the breeze. His mother, standing at the edge of the pine needles, discovered the bones of a child wrapped in a pink blanket.

Very creepy. And oh there are so many directions you could take that short snippet. I want to follow that trail through to the end. Loved it!
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I have loved reading this, I didn’t do this exercise, I was in NYC on Saturday, but I couldn’t wait to read the ones you chose, you crafted and as always, you engage and then twist, leaving me gasping.
WOW.
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Holy Mother of Elvis! That was good.
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standing at the edge of the pine needles – love that bit
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Wow, Tara..nice.
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Sudden vision of impatiens turning into pink baby bones. Yikes, Tara!
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Oh, so good. My heart lurched at the ending sentence. Liked how you used the sense of smell and touch. Excellent piece.
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Beautifully done! Great story-telling in those 33 words. Creepy, but what a fantastic use of the prompt!
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Oh this is really good. Creepy, but really good.
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as sad as the message, it was very well-written, particularly the combination of the soothing imagery, then the unanticipated discovery.
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