Relief came Hanging from the tree house railing, impatiens swing in the breeze. His mother, standing at the edge of the pine needles, discovered the bones of a child wrapped in a pink blanket. The Trifextra weekend challenge was to choose 33 words from a single page in Elizabeth Strout’s “Olive Kitteridge,” and reshape those words into a piece of (our) own. Advertisements Spread the love:Click to email (Opens in new window)Click to print (Opens in new window)Share on Facebook (Opens in new window)Click to share on Twitter (Opens in new window)Like this:Like Loading... Related 20 thoughts on “Relief came” Add yours Very creepy. And oh there are so many directions you could take that short snippet. I want to follow that trail through to the end. Loved it! LikeLike Reply I have loved reading this, I didn’t do this exercise, I was in NYC on Saturday, but I couldn’t wait to read the ones you chose, you crafted and as always, you engage and then twist, leaving me gasping. WOW. LikeLike Reply Holy Mother of Elvis! That was good. LikeLike Reply standing at the edge of the pine needles – love that bit LikeLike Reply Wow, Tara..nice. LikeLike Reply Sudden vision of impatiens turning into pink baby bones. Yikes, Tara! LikeLike Reply Oh, so good. My heart lurched at the ending sentence. Liked how you used the sense of smell and touch. Excellent piece. LikeLike Reply Beautifully done! Great story-telling in those 33 words. Creepy, but what a fantastic use of the prompt! LikeLike Reply Oh this is really good. Creepy, but really good. LikeLike Reply as sad as the message, it was very well-written, particularly the combination of the soothing imagery, then the unanticipated discovery. LikeLike Reply vivid, terrifying, a nightmare! LikeLike Reply Very vivid picture, then with the sock to the gut. Great job with this prompt! LikeLike Reply So sad LikeLike Reply Ohhh…poor kid & what a shocking discovery for the narrator’s mother!This is amazing writing Tara-loved it:-) LikeLike Reply Oh my, heartbreaking and vivid! LikeLike Reply Wow! You did really well with this one! LikeLike Reply Great reformation of the available words. A vivid and sad tale. LikeLike Reply oh, Tara! You went there. good stuff! LikeLike Reply Oh, sadness! Heartbreaking piece here, which makes the lovely photo haunting. LikeLike Reply My goodness! Crushing…and I thought I was…… ah you artist you..you reached hard, and twisted inner senses there… you managed to create such impact, even with ‘other’ words… LikeLike Reply So, tell me what you really think: Cancel reply Enter your comment here... Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in: Email (required) (Address never made public) Name (required) Website You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. ( Log Out / Change ) You are commenting using your Twitter account. ( Log Out / Change ) You are commenting using your Facebook account. ( Log Out / Change ) You are commenting using your Google+ account. ( Log Out / Change ) Cancel Connecting to %s Notify me of new comments via email. Notify me of new posts via email.