The phone rang at 4a.m.
“Was it quick?”
“It was… peaceful.”
“We could’ve done more.”
“She was ready.”
“How could you know that?”
“She told me.”
“I’m not ready.”
“You have to let her go.”
Each submission to this weekend’s Trifextra starts with the same five words: “The phone rang at 4a.m.” The challenge is to complete the story in only 33 more.
20 thoughts on “Never”
What Lance said, “Emotional punch.” That was intense – the photo but more so the story. Great job.
What a compelling picture to go with the intense writing! It adds another dimension to the story so well.
I love how you captured the emotion within the dialogue, all an extension of the image created with the photo. Nicely done.
Wow, great flash and all in dialogue. The photo, too, is fantastic.
The dolls on the grave make me think of a child’s death, which makes the pain that much worse.
That is exactly how I found the gravestone. Based on the dates, the person interred there was in her early 20s. The dolls were an odd decoration. It made me wonder about the person they were meant to memorialize.
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You said so much in so little. I believe that is the point of the challenge!