The boy’s childish rejection stung. Coral felt a flush of anger rising in her chest. Nash got his nasty manners from his mother.
“Careful, Nash sweetie, don’t run,” she called through clenched teeth, then whispered, “you might get hit by a car.”
Standing off from the swings, Coral fidgeted with her hair, twisting a strand painfully around one finger.
Trey paid more attention to that brat than to her. Thankfully, Nash lived with his mother, or she’d never get time with Trey alone. If it were her decision, she’d ship the boy off to boarding school until he turned eighteen.
Thin spiral notebook 
No one is black or white… just grey and greyer… I instinctively didn’t want to like Coral after reading this… She isn’t what we can call a saint… And perhaps her ill-will is out of proportion… But she has her reasons..
You have built a very complex character in so few words. Good work!
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This evoked anger in me. I know she is hurting and her reaction comes from pain but there seems to be too much selfishness in her too. Very well written.
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Oooh, there’s a bit of a switch in this one. I started off sympathising with her but then she became a bit of a meanie. Seems I should have stuck with my initial reaction and trusted the boy. A different voice again!
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She sounds kind of awful, but I can see that her attitude springs from hurt. If Nash liked her, she might like him more. It’s still her fault for choosing that attitude. But I can see this thread of jealousy running through each voice so far. I wonder if Daddy Dearest is jealous of anyone, and whom?
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Yikes.
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Ah, I wonder if Daddy will pick up on Coral’s less than parental attitude. Or is he blinded by lust?
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Sounds like Nash has it exactly right about Coral.
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Seems like Trey should have gotten to know Coral a little better before marrying her…
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Ooh.
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