‘Til death do us part

His voice was in her head as she gathered his things. When she was pregnant with their first, he teased her about “nesting,” laying everything perfectly for their baby.

What would he call this, “distancing?”

Picking up his can of shaving gel, she held it to her face, breathing in his scent. She put it aside, thinking she’d keep it to use herself, making that memory last just a little longer.

In the end she added the can to the bin, knowing she couldn’t use it without crying. Can’t be crying with a razor in her hand, anything could happen.

The 100 Word Challenge, a writing prompt created by Velvet Verbosity, takes a single theme to tell a story in only 100 words ~ no more, no less. This week’s theme is ‘Distancing.’

  1. Good idea putting it in the bin. I like the idea of not being able to trust ourselves.

    Like

    Reply

  2. An amazing piece of writing. Open-ended, visual, highly emotional. Love it!

    Like

    Reply

  3. Dysfunctional Mom October 23, 2012 at 11:24 pm

    I love everything about this post….

    Like

    Reply

  4. Love it. and yes, goosebumps again. This was a beautifully imaged piece. And so sad. I hope neither of us ever have to REALLY be there.

    Like

    Reply

  5. I love the way you left it open-ended for me to wonder if he left or died. That last line is perfect.

    Like

    Reply

  6. it’s interesting and kind of sad that I am reading this on the anniversary of the death of my dad. Even to this day, when I smell his cologne on someone else or see a freshly pressed button down shirt it takes me right back to one of his hugs. This reminded me of those moments that the memories take me by surprise.

    the language was lovely.

    Like

    Reply

  7. Oooh – the veiled threat of self harm in that last line is so perfect.

    Like

    Reply

  8. umph….the details of the shaving can and razor were perfect. They’re mixed metaphors for the emotional state. Amazing 1oo.

    Like

    Reply

Join the discussion...

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s

%d bloggers like this: