
It was paradise. Gentle, summer rains fell lightly on lush green fields. It was a land of plenty, we wanted for nothing. Our neighbors were like family, sharing good fortune and abundance.
At first there were only minor disagreements, superficial injuries and illnesses. Even then, the community gathered in peaceful cooperation to achieve our mutual goals.
We weren’t under the mistaken delusion that this was a utopia where nothing bad happened, where no evil lurked. Still, it was the closest thing we could hope to perfect.
That was until the clouds passed over the town. Thick and black, they hung low over the foothills, shrouding the peaks in a curious fog. Blocking out the blue sky, a yellow pallor blanketed everything.
Soon it covered the whole valley, a sick sallowness that seemed to seep into our pores, permeating every aspect of our lives. It was an apathy so oppressive all love and joy was overshadowed by a deep, harrowing sadness.
The Wittmyers were the first family to leave. They packed only what they needed, then left their home, unlocked and seemingly occupied to any who would peer into their windows.
Next it was Principal Joe Harris with his wife and kids, then Sheriff Fisher.
When Pastor Troyer disappeared in the middle of the night, all faith was lost. In two days the entire town fled. It was as if the clouds banished every living thing.
I don’t know why I came back. I guess in the back of my mind, I hoped the exodus wasn’t final. That the town didn’t die, that other people had returned.
A chain-linked fence blocked my entry into the abandoned town. Pad locks on the gates, rusted from long exposure to the weather, kept me from exploring the deserted streets. From where I stood, the sky was still an eerie, unnatural color.
This desolate summer will end when the last building crumbles to the ground.


Sad. Palpable ugliness. Sad now, am I.
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Has a dystopian feel to it. It made me sad, particularly the futile effort of the woman who returned. Sigh. I think I need a drink.
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I like the tension that seems to permeate everything, like the clouds.
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So sad how things like this happen. Great writing.
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it’s hard to believe that something so beautiful has crumbled or become ugly. I actually liked how she came back, as if there is a belief in her heart beyond what her eyes are seeing. It’s sad when you realize all that’s left to do is crumble.
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As beautiful as the first two lines were, I knew they were setting up something unsettling. Love the names, simple, easy to remember and then those last 4 lines are awesome.
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Wow. from paradise to desolation with some awesome word choice in between. You describe the suffocation really well and I like the mystery which inhabits this piece. Kind of enigmatic and cool.
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