Her bony finger, shroud in a white cotton glove, stroked the nursery armoire, seeking out evidence of the child who once slept in the room, inspecting for dust lingering where it wasn’t welcome.
The Trifecta weekend challenge is to write a 33-word opening line to [our] book, an incipit.
Thin spiral notebook 
Ominous! Nothing scary has actually happened, but your language choices still make this nicely unsettling.
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just those few words create such a vivid picture. wow tara! but then again, i’ve always thought your writing was amazing. xo
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The visuals here are perfect. The bony finger, the glove, the child who used to be here. The dust. Would love to read more.
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What happened in that room before? Love suspence!
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The dust and the child “…who once slept in the room…” are real grabbers. I need to know more.
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Suspense. More of it please.
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it does sound like there is some darker undertone in this line. it’s one of my favs from this challenge.
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I like how the lines flow into an intriquing story of suspense or even horror.
more please
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Ditto every word in Lance’s comment. Well done.
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This sounds just sinister enough to make me want to sink my teeth into this story. I do want more. Please?
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“dust lingering where it wasn’t welcome.” Perfect line! Your imagery was vivid. I can see this happening.
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